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Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Free Admission to Museums. You should write at least 一二零 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:Wa5中文字网

一. 越来越多的博物馆免费对外开放的目的是什么?Wa5中文字网

二. 也会带来一些问题;Wa5中文字网

三. 你的看法?Wa5中文字网

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二零零九年的四级考试作文沿袭了近几年四级作文的特点,即问题解决型+观点对比型的结合。属社会类话题,纵观各个辅导机构的猜测作文,没有人猜测博物馆的话题。但是就今年的考题形式而言,三个段落的写法在课堂上都讲到了。下面是分析:Wa5中文字网

按照课堂所讲审题阶段应该关注英文标题和汉语提纲,即:一)Free Admission to Museums 二)汉语提纲三条。从中可知,核心话题是free admission, 从三个方面来探讨这一话题即可。Wa5中文字网

根据"先结构后表达"的原则安排段落结构即可做到结构清晰:Wa5中文字网

先结构:Wa5中文字网

一、段写该现象的目的(其实就是好处);Wa5中文字网

二、段写问题(即负面影响);Wa5中文字网

三、段写看法(或解决措施)Wa5中文字网

后表达:Wa5中文字网

确定好各段结构之后,利用三分钟时间联想各部分可以选用的句式和词汇表达,并以关键词的形式列出以帮助自己理顺写作的思维。Wa5中文字网

写作完成之后,检查。Wa5中文字网

下面为用课堂所讲套路写的简易版本,供大家参考。Wa5中文字网

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版本一:In recent years, an increasing number of museums become free to the public. (或:It can be noticed that ...)There are several aims for this phenomenon, but the following may be the most critical. Free admission enables people, especially students, to have more opportunities to visit museums, where they can acquire knowledge of history, arts, customs and so forth.Wa5中文字网

版本二: According to a recent survey by China Daily, about 八四.三% of museums become free to the public. By doing so, museums attract millions of people to visit every day. In addition, the visitors, especially students, broaden their horizons and enlarge their scope of knowledge.Wa5中文字网

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There are, however, several negative effects which we can not turn a blind eye to. Firstly, owing to free admission, a large number of visitors will visit museums. Consequently, the museum may become too crowded. Even worse, free admission may result in some financial problems. For instance, museum workers can hardly get enough salary. Last but not least, the preservation of cultural heritage may be impaired.Wa5中文字网

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版本一:(课堂讲过的) Personally, I am convinced that free admission to museum is a two-edged sword, which presents us both advantages and troubles. The best policy, as I see it, is to maximize the benefits and minimize the negative influences.Wa5中文字网

版本二:From my point of view, it is high time that we took measures to eliminate the negative impacts. Firstly, regulations should be worked out to limit the number of visitors to museum every day. Secondly, it is advisable for government to offer financial assistance to museums. Only in this way can museums provide service to public in a better way.Wa5中文字网

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